Title: SECRET DOIRES Genre: YA Fantasy Word Count: 62,000
Pitch: Burdened with the secret of becoming a faery warrior, studious fourteen-year-old Liz must prepare for a war in a world she never knew existed against enemies already hunting her, making high school more complicated.
First 150 words: (updated at 9:10 a.m.)
Liz felt foolish, even childish, sneaking to follow her parents. Tomorrow was her first day of high school. She promised herself she would get to bed soon, but for now she needed to stay out of sight.
“Where are they going?” she whispered, her heart racing.
She scurried through their backyard, hearing the familiar sound of the rolling waves below. Her parents ventured closer to the cliff’s edge, stopping at a large oak. Liz, hidden from their sight, stared.
A sudden breeze sent a chill down her spine and the hair on her arms stood up. She watched, wide-eyed, as the oak began to sway and shudder. Then a section of the trunk just . . . swung open, revealing only blackness.
Her head bobbed from treetop to door in disbelief.
She felt frozen, struggling just to breathe. But when the oak shuddered again, Liz instinctively lunged for the opening.
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